100 % Review Forum Literary Drama Fiction

My story, The Fall of An Empire follows a strong willed, intelligent, 18 year old Nathaniel Stone and his struggle up the social pyramid. The youth struggles with everyday concepts from sex, to making the right choices. Ultimately Nathaniel makes it up that pyramids, but in the end he comes tumbling down it. This is still a work in prog but so far I have 17K words on this story. Critiques would be much appreciated being though this is something that is out of my element.