100 % Review Forum Greetings all! Would love a re..

I posted my first chapter of my first novel here a couple days ago and I'd love for some reviews. I'm concerned that it doesn't catch attention or the flow of the story is confusing. If anyone has the time to check it out I'd much appreciate it! 

Thanks everyone! I'd be very glad to review anyone else's works. :D

Thanks again!

Frannie