100 % Review Forum Vampire story!

Hello fellow readers and writers alike, I am writing to you all in hopes that you will read my story(s). They are about vampires (NOT the lovey dovey sparkly kind.) And I understand that the genre does not interest a lot of people, but these stories are completely fresh and do not plagiarise the vampire diaries, twilight, etc, etc. There are currently two stories, book three is still in the works. The first one takes place here in modern times, the story follows an average guy named Nick in his hometown, where there are a series of strange murders. A day or two after the murders start, a new girl transfers to Nick's school. Suspicious? Could be. Here is a paragraph taken from a few paragraphs into the story: (If you want to read the story from the beginning, you can find 'book one: A Hero's Journey' on my profile, aswell as book two and the first few chapters of book three) "I continued on and a soft wind brushed against my arm. That was odd, the bushes nearby didn't sway in the slight breeze, It had felt as if someone ran by me. I continued, slightly frightened. Then I was knocked to the ground from behind, hard. I got up, and looked around, hoping to find some guys from school pulling a prank on me, but saw nothing. I was cut on my knees and hands. I was about 2 blocks away from home and figured I could run the rest of the way fast enough so whoever was out there wouldn't catch me. As I ran I constantly got the feeling of being watched. I looked back, it was twilight, and in the dim light I could have sworn that I saw someone standing under a distant streetlight. I came to my house, opened the door, stepped through, slammed it and bolted it. I grabbed a sharp knife from the knife holder on the counter and checked my house, not that I thought there was someone here, I did it solely to put my subconscious mind at ease. Once I saw that there was no one in my house, I checked all of the windows and doors to make sure that they were all locked. After that, I checked outside and checked the surrounding streets, after confirming that I was alone, I went to my room and fell asleep on the bed."