Phantastic Phantasy Forum Critical Reviews Welcomed!!!

I just joined not to long ago, and I am in need of a review on my book. I am wanting to publish this as a book and/or ebook eventually regardless of reviews given.

The main reason I would like more critical reviews given is that I can improve my writing as I write the next two books which is already in progress. All I ask is if you could focus on my writing, characters, and plot.

Thanks, and I greatly appreciate it.

Thanks,

Amaya

What book is it?