The Review Club Forum Belle discussion

This is the place for discussion for any of Belle's pieces

In order to make things a bit easier, here are links to the chapters of Lady Gwendolyn. I have a few other stories posted as well, but they are short stories without continuation.


Chapter 1 Chapter 2 Chapter 3
Chapter 4 Chapter 5 Chapter 6
Chapter 7 Chapter 8 Chapter 9
Chapter 10 Chapter 11 Chapter 12
Chapter 13 Chapter 14 Chapter 15
Chapter 16 Chapter 17

Thanks Belle :)

Review up Belle, sorry I could be more helpful. That was very good writing.

Not helpful? You made some great suggestions that no one else thought of on "The Bath"!

(Of course, it's hard to nitpick perfection.) ::tongue::


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Brent - thank you for your comments on "Book Fairs" and "Press Kits". I hope they'll be of practical help to you in your endeavors.

Cameron - thank you for your review on "The First Texas Twister". It was fun making up a tall tale. I wonder at your comment about the narrator's voice, though. I think if I threw it in the middle of the tale, it would pull the reader out of the story's flow.

It might. But I did find myself looking for it as I was reading it. Especially when you broke from one set of characters to another one.

Ahhh. Okay, that makes sense.

Julie - thank you so much for your review of Lady G - ch. 5. You are so right. The protagonist doesn't step forward very quickly. And, that's because I made the first few chapters up as I went, without giving the plot line much thought. It wasn't until several chapters in that I realized who the hero would be. ::confused:: I'm still not too sure about the heroine (she says at ch. 15), though I think it will be Madeleine aka Lady Gwendolyn. (What will she do with the REAL Lady G, I hear you asking. As of yet, I have no idea. *sigh*)

Whenever (if ever) I get to a rewrite, a LOT of issues will have to be addressed and ironed out. So, please keep talking to me. I need to know where the potholes are. ::biggrin::

Belle:

I hadn't realized you were writing this as it went along. In that case, hats off to you. So are you gonna give me a hint as to who the male lead is? I vote for Ian and definately Madeleline. They are very fire and ice.

Julie

Sure, Julie. The protagonist is Beowyn. Ian is the dark, evil bad guy (with a dratted conscience). I've yet to reveal (or figure out) who's pulling his strings, but I'm getting warmer. Though, on the plus side, I do know why all of this is happening. (So, it's not a complete train wreck. hehehe)

Belle:

Never saw that one coming. Puts a whole new spin.

B. Billy - thank you very much for your review on Lady G. ch. 2. All of your comments are spot on. I've started collecting the reviews in Word, so when I'm ready for rewrites, I'll have these in one place.

It's funny. I'm usually pretty good at spotting similar words too close together in other people's work, but in my own....? ::mad::

ahhh

Hi, guys. I'm here, just lurking. The 'hacker fool' tried to hit my profile yesterday. That's why I closed it, but it's just temporary, until security is in place to stop this guy.

I explained it to Cameron, so I didn't just *poof* disappear*. ::cool::

I thought that was the deal. I thought once you closed your profile that was it no more posts or anything. I was sad because I didn't get to say good bye ::confused::

BTW got a message that says you reviewed me but I can't see it. I guess it'll come back up once the hacker fools are fixed.

Anthony - I was experimenting with the review tags to see which still worked. I used one of your pieces to do it, then deleted the whole thing. Sorry. I should have told you. ::smile:: There's not much left. Just underline, bold, italics. No more strike, font colors, anything. When this dies down, I'm gonna petition Charlie to get the simpler coding re-allowed.

(Oh, yeah, when I deleted that review, I also accidentally deleted the real review I'd left you several weeks ago. I am such a clutz sometimes!!)

Bah sucks rox on the old review but 'll live.... meep meep Yea when you petition let me know too and I'll join in with you.

I'm back. ::biggrin::

CC - thank you so much for your review of Lady G-2. As much as I needed to hear where the chapter/story could be bolstered, I seem to be at a place where I really need to hear what I'm doing right, and you gave me that. I can't thank you enough. (I hate feeling so unsure of my ability, but it sneaks up and bites me from time to time.)