The Review Club Forum Julie discussion

This is the place for discussion on any of Julie's pieces

Belle:

Thanks for the edits. You are very good at picking that stuff up and I appreciate it. Thanks for the review.

Julie

Gabe:

Thanks for the review. Quick question. Knowing Geri and now the cop, Viv, do you forsee Ben ending up with one or the other? And how much can Geri get away with?

Thanks,

Julie

Bent is the shinizzle.

Anthony rocks. Thanks so much for the nice words and for the edits. I need plenty of help. I hope I can finish it. I just wrote 2 chapters and realized I'd completely lost the plot, so I scrapped them. Then I had a breakthrough, so I'm hoping I get it finished. Fingers crossed at 50 pages. As far as chapters, I like short ones. Just a preference for the sake of pace, but yeah, I do see your point. Thanks again.

cc:

Wonderfula dn helpful review. Good suggestions too (as always).

Thanks you rock.

Julie

Rob:

Thanks for the review, and the suggestion of 3rd POV and developing the charcaters more. Fucked was aimed at showing the clinical, ritualistic relationship between the addict and the drug (or vehicle in this case). I guess it didn't quite hit the mark, so thanks for your thoughts in revision.

Julie

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Hey Julie,

Don't get me wrong. I thought it was a pretty clever piece and you are the master of plot. It just seemed to me that the real clincher is the psychological dependency that can only come from "her"/the addict, which can't be shown from the POV of the drug. Does that make sense?

Rob:

It makes total sense, and I know it is missing something. I think you, cc, and cameron all hinted at it. Now I just need to figure out how to write the damn thing. ::biggrin:: I appreciate your comments, and think you just might be right about what it needs.

Thanks,

Julie

Brent:

Thanks for the great review. I agree I need to pull the action into the story sooner. I've been racking my brain to figure a way to do so, but you are totally right that I need to. Great edits, which are deeply appreciated.

Thanks,

Julie

Kim:

Thanks for the nice words, and the edits, which I always need. As to what's going to happen in the story? Beats me! Stupid plot. Anyways, I apprecaite your review. You Rock!

Julie

Brent:

Thanks for the review. I still think you are dead on about the first chapter needing something that hooks the reader, but I'm glad you're feeling better in general about it. Good points on the accent, which is sort of important as the novel moves on. I'm glad you want to know the big con....now if I could only figure it out as well. ::suprised::

Great edits. Thanks for the review.

Julie

Mike:

Thanks for the review of Sex with a Shooting Star. I think you're right and I don't do the character of Jodie justice. Originally, I wrote it as a flash peice to fit into the junky tales, so I focused on keeping it under 2k, and making sure there was a twist. As I've moved away from those shorts, I do feel like I let that one go without really exploring it. And until your review, I wasn't sure what it lacked, just that something was missing. So thanks. Great review.

Julie

Yeah, as I was reading it, it had a flash fiction sound. I'm never quite sure how to do flash fiction. It's such a challenge building characterization and story while be forced to economize your words so drastically. All that considered, you did really well with it.

Anthony:

Thanks for thre review of chapter 11 & 12. I think you totally are onto something with Geraldine and Herschel's reaction. Great points. Thanks so much for the edits too.

Julie

Cam:

Thanks for the nice words about Bent. I will work on cleaner transitions.

Julie

Belle:

Thanks for the 2nd Coming edits. They are, as always very helpful. If you wouldn't mind when reading additional chapters keeping an eye out for mistakes within religious dogma, I'd appreciate it. I'm doing a lot of research but sometimes it's nothing in comparison to real world experience.

Thanks,

Julie

Brent:

You and Gabe both have hit on the lack of progress, and goals in Bent, and I couldn't agree more. It needs plenty of work, so much that I hate you even open the file anymore. I appreciate your edits, and completely agree. Thanks a ton.

Julie

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BS they are a joy to read. Can't wait to read more. You have so much wit in your writing!

Aren't u sweet, but full of s**t! Thanks Anthony for the kindness.

Gabe:

Thanks for the reviews. I see you have new picket fences up too. Busy day for you! I hope you like 2nd more. And of course, narrative description of the world is lacking. I will keep that in min in revision and in future chapters. Cuz as cc says....I don't Waaaannnnaaa write it. ::biggrin::

And stupid trace and trance. jeesh!

Thanks again,

Julie