The Review Club Forum Julie discussion

Tom:

Thanks for your review. Lots of interesting points. I'm glad you thought it was an interesting premise, and sorry you did not find the writing to your liking. The thing is, I am trying for a less than serious commerical urban fantasy. I want the tongue in cheek response, the groans of a really bad joke. I am not going for beautiful prose. I leave that to you literary guys ::biggrin:: But I do see what you are saying.

Thanks for pointing out examples of problem lines. I appreaciate your time and effort.

Julie

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Talk about the toilet bowl calling the seat brown.

tee hee. That must be one of those homespun Lousiana things.

Cam:

Thanks for the review of 2nd Coming 7 & 8. I appreciate your comments. As far as Mary and Lilith, I'll have to let you read on, but I'm not convinced that tying Jace to Lilith is a problem if that was what you meant. The black and white comparison, yeah, that's something I plan to revise when I'm done. Thanks.

Again, you rock for the review!

Julie

Brent:

Thanks for teh review. You really made my day with it. You know how you get to a point in a novel, and feel like you should just give up, and suddenly someone gives you a reason to push on. Well, today that person is you for which I appreciate greatly. I also appreciate the edits, and the need for more tension coming out of that second chapter. Great review, and very much appreciated.

Julie

Cam:

Thanks again for the review. We already talked over the points so I won't press on them. I appreciate your comments, and will take them into consideration, specially around the hooker with the heart of gold.

Thanks again,

Julie

You still rock anyways :)

Julie,

Just reviewed, "2nd coming, chapters 1and2.   Forgive me for going so far back, but I hate coming into something in the middle and not knowing the story.  

If anything I noted in the review has already been said...just ignore. lol.

I will add one thing, as always, I think your pacing is very quick and you get into the story masterfully.  But there are spots I noted in which your moving too quick, and thus skipping over some very good opportunities to paint a more vivid picture without slowing your wonderful pace.  

If you disagree, I can accept because most were nit pikky items anyway, but I felt they could only enhance your story.  

If you have any questions or want to discuss, just drop me a line, or post here and I  will respond.

Nick.

Nick:

How could I possibly disagree? Thank you for a wonderfully detailed review, and pointing out those little things that I often gloss over in a draft. Your review pointed to many areas I need to look at, and most importantly, reminds me to slow down when writing. I do however appreicate being the only writer to use the River Styx as a descriptor. :) Again, wonderful review and thanks for it.

Julie