Want Some Reviews? Forum Any Critics after a new read

Hi All

The Crack:
My friend and I are mid-way through writing a Minecraft story, and are in desperate need of a some friendly critics who have some empty space in their schedule to review our stories.

Background of our stories:
Each of our stories are based around the same events, but we are doing different characters perspectives in each of our version of the story.
My story is called The Block Dweller Chronicles: Kai's Tale
Mr friend's is called The Block Dweller Chronicles: The Lone Valkarie

Again...
Thanks so much for your time and I hope you in enjoy either of our stories :D

Aaron S Armstrong