Want Some Reviews? Forum A work of love since 2008

Hi all. I am new to WritersCafe.Org and am looking for some assistance on my book. I have been working on it since 2008 and would like to make into a series as I am working on book 2 of it. It is called The Black Blood Legacies: Fate's Crossing. I know it has a lot of work still yet required. My eyes are just giving out at looking at it. I need CONSTRUCTIVE help. Negative commentary tempered with positive encouragements. I will do my best to return the favor to anyone who reviews my work (bear in mind my class session will be starting on the 5th and as I am a graduate student this will take up a lot of time on my part!). So please and thank you!
- Jeri Smith

ALSO - I will post my Preface of my book here to the group and if you want to see more please got to my profile. Thanks!
- J. Smith