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Reluctant to walk this path
yet knew the day would come
To let all go and fall away --
a loss that has no end.

The past slips, its colors fade,
I try to pull it back,
as with a heavy, large blanket
that has fallen to the floor.

But sadly, it disappears,
leaving only memories.
Pictures forming now
in tender tears and talk.

An acceptance of this even
remotely being real
only leaves the question:
what ever will be next?

I'm new to this group.

I'm new to this group.

Thank you so much for your feedback.  I appreciate it!  And you're right, writing helps tremendously.  I'm sorry that you have experienced this same thing.  It's so difficult.

This poem is beautiful in the way that it is so simple, yet so emotionally profound. You don't use a rhyme scheme or any fancy literary elements, but you don't need to. Sometimes it's the simple images, like that of a heavy blanket that has fallen to the floor, that mean the most. Those are the things that express your deepest personal understanding of things - they are what you visualize when you are going through intense situations, and they stick with you, even if they don't always make sense. However, on some level, everyone can comprehend what you're getting at with these images. I'm not sure if I'm making any sense right now, but your poem touched me deeply. I will be praying for you and your mom.