Want Some Reviews? Forum Hello!

Hello! I have been trying to write stories for a while now. I have posted a Story with the first chapter. It is called The Broken Path. I have had this idea for a while now, just wanted to get it out, so I can have anyone tell me, How I can approve on this story, What things I need to take out, or put in. Any Good Plot twists, any more good details to add, etc! Just a warning, I am not the best writer at all, I would love to learn how to improve and all! :) Please check out my story and tell me what you all think! Thanks!