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Every breathe of life counts
 every struggle to survive in those days
 darkness surrounded the world with clouds
enormous, vicious clouds of shade
 "succumb to misery my little children
 my poor, wreched, suffering slaves''
 hissed the darkness throughout space
and death came swiftly hovering
over this eternal night of hate
~~~
 A single candle burns with light
 trying hard not to fade
 facing it sat i, gazing at the only flame
watching it grow bigger in mind
 rising higher to the sky in a race
like a sun all over the horizon shines
 erasing the dark, allowing dawn to break
for this very thought my heart aches
 knowing it is only an image in my brain
knowing that this terror is never to end
 ~~~
so i lie with eyes wide open
waiting for them to close my grave
listening to the sweet melancholy
that in my heart consistantly plays
 willingly giving in to the everlasting sleep
that with kisses shall fill my cheeks
  and forever shall my soul embrace

hey guys it's only my first poem so cut me some slack ok? XD

Feels bleak, but i think it is supposed to.  The title 'Aurora' makes me expect something along the lines of beautiful.  Your poem was sad, but I enjoyed it.

For a first time writing a poem I believe you did a great job. Poetry isn't for me, I never understand what it is the poet is talking about. Yours I understood from start to finish. Thank you for sharing and keep doing what you do.