http://slow.writerscafe.org/jmuah2 The original writings of author Righter en-us Copyright 2026 WritersCafe.org 1776783677 WritersCafe.org RSS Generator 15 This is just the opening to a short story I am working on. Does it grab your attention? How would you suggest I improve it? http://slow.writerscafe.org/writing/jmuah2/383687/