http://slow.writerscafe.org/tomtar The original writings of author Tom en-us Copyright 2026 WritersCafe.org 1776050725 WritersCafe.org RSS Generator 15 I want a critique on this. If you could just try and say what you think the purpose/message of it is that's the main thing I'm looking for. Be brutal with it they are the most helpful. Thanks http://slow.writerscafe.org/writing/tomtar/1139710/