http://slow.writerscafe.org/Suny The original writings of author Suny en-us Copyright 2026 WritersCafe.org 1779800188 WritersCafe.org RSS Generator 15 When loving was so coldYou stood and you would loveWhen we were growing oldYou dreamt of being youngWhen life was horribleYour heart was a passionYou were adorableAnd your heart was massiveIf you want to unfoldWhen you feel you are lostInstead of being oldRemember to be youngAs you once were. http://slow.writerscafe.org/writing/Suny/1330500/ My first try at writing an iambic pentameter poem. I just want some advice and "constructive criticism." Just some tips on grammar, form, wording, etc. Anything helps. http://slow.writerscafe.org/writing/Suny/1312802/