& You Don't Know

& you DON'T know how i feel. [our lady peace: i'd sell my soul, & you don't know how this feels.]

& you [don’t] know how i feel

 

[cut.me.open]
pour salt into the open wound
new cuts cover where the old ones are
& you don’t know what it’s like

so just

 

[break.me.down]
snap me like a twig
you know i’m fragile
so just keep f*****g with me

 

& don’t

 

[leave.me.alone]
because you know i need you
even if i won’t admit it
you have that power over me

 

to just

 

[make.me.melt]
you’re like fire
i’m like ice
don’t pretend you don’t know it

 

because

 

[i’m.not.stupid]
&
you [don’t] know how this feels.

 

[but you’re the only one that can make the pain . s t o p . . . ]

Reviews

[Lexy]

Hey, you have a unique writing style. I really like this piece.

After reading this again, I said "damn, this is good."

[The Dark Passenger]

lol. you just wrote out my life...
I guess that's why I feel like this is a really confronting piece of work. It's really beautiful though, and well structured. I love your unique style.
Not sure it really fit in with the sort of darkness I had in mind for the "Something Wicked This Way Comes" competition. Submit it into my new contest "Hearts are meant for breaking"

[THE BLACK SEAL]

aahh the old take advantage relationship well written

[xXx JakBeNimble xXx]

beautiful

emotional greatness!

[Andromeda]

i really like all the brackets and stuff. fantastic!

[Mary E. Green]

Wow... I like this. You can feel your emotions. It's a very good write.

[Aaron J. Wald]

OMG! This is beautiful! And I love how you have written it. Deeply satisfying and a great piece to describe my last relationship. *claps hands* I love this piece.... I hope to some day marry it.