parallel universe

tanka

 

 

 

 

 

 

a different sun

shines on his world -- probably

a different moon

too -- i cannot see in his

light -- he cannot see in mine

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Rita L. Sev]

This feels like a relationship that is either physically or emotionally distant (or maybe both...)
"I cannot see in his light - he cannot see in mine." - The two parties are not able to communicate, to make the other understand...

Good use of Tanka form...

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Splendid read and write...:)

[Mizo4]

coolbeans, sorta musing the essence of a new world and the simple differences of a new sun and moon etc,

[Sami Khalil]

I believe in parallel universes and the power of this poem. A great job...:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like how you use the form...

and i like this...i see it more as one person just analyzing what it is like when looking at another...realizing, hey, we are different...different lights shine on our worlds...and moons too...even if it is the same moon...it shines on each of us a little differently and we are all just a bit different from each other..that makes the world go round..

sometimes we think we really know people...but do we?