porcupine

the dmz between us and others

 

too close  . . .  how afraid i

am of that  . . .  yet how i long

for it.  what is this

great inky emptiness i

cannot fill?  where does the shame

come from?  will someone

take it?  could anyone bear

it?  why does it glower

inside me? must i keep it?

here, take it.  don’t get too close.

 

Reviews

[linda m. crate]

I really like this. It's got an air of mystery and intrigue to it, and yet it's completely easy to relate to because we all have felt empty and devoid of something at some point in our lives; we've all known the tinge of shame and regret. This reminds me of the song where the singer says that he'll give all his secrets away. Very well done! Short but sweet, and very thought provoking.

[annie lee]

Thank you.

[DrD]

Self exploration is always a difficult theme but as always, you took it on and gave it your touch of grace and beauty. Extremely well done and with a true economy of words, you spoke volumes. I enjoyed it completely.

[annie lee]

Thank you.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

what is this
great inky emptiness i
cannot fill?

This is my question these days. Haha. Perceptive write, Annie. :)

[annie lee]

Thanks for your read and review.

[Laminators Dubai]

inky emptiness i
cannot fill? ...

im not your friend anymore!
im you FAN now ! XD

loved it!

[annie lee]

Thanks so much.

[Jack...]

Invisible to many, yet it stares us straight in the face. Like a visiting in-law we wish would leave, but don't have the heart or the energy to tell them. Nicely done my new friend.

[annie lee]

Thank you, Jack.

[Rita L. Sev]

Shame burns, whether kept smoldering inside or in the open air... it is a tragedy of our humanity. This is a well crafted piece, Annie.

[annie lee]

Thank you, Rita.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A lovely well balanced piece of poetry that has such a powerful message in such a short verse. It describes the feelings without telling us anything. It has a Catholic feel to it.

[annie lee]

Thanks for your review.

[Eddie Phillips]

I like how you constructed the poem to look detached. It was a nice touch. The tone and artistry of the piece made it a masterpiece. I really liked this idea and poem.

[annie lee]

Thank you so much.

[M. Stein]

I love how easily this is to relate to, truly! The last lines are amazing.

Here take it

Don't get too close

Ain't that the truth! This was really good!

[annie lee]

Thank you. So many of us live in similar pools of light -- we need to recognize each other and deny the fear.

[Sami Khalil]

Be strong. Be hopeful . Be the glower in the night...Bravo

[annie lee]

Thank you, Sami. It is a journey.

[Sami Khalil]

I understand...You are welcome...:)