Touch of your lips

Sweaty skin pressed against me

Feel her lips upon my navel

Move lower until I groan

Oh Baby, that’s how it goes

You know how to turn me wild

With a simple touch of your mouth

 

Reviews

[PureSyn]

The mouth can do many intimate things indeed. Short but oh so sexy. Loved it!

Nicole

[BL00DY-K1TTEN]

so much description in so little writing. good job this poem is hawt

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short..and yet i see so much happening..truly sensual. good work

[Tom Wilson]

Um...yes, please!

[Tai Chi Italy Take Two]

Your poem speaks in his voice, which being a man is straight to the point, but Sweaty is not something that inspires desire in my book, ladies perspire, it does however improve and finishes well, but the Sweaty image could be improved. Just a thought from, LLB

[Collette]

Delicious little piece you have here.
Sexy and sultry...
I enjoyed this read enough to think of it later on tonight....

[None]

I notice the people trying to change your words don't even have any poems/stories posted? Some remind me of Simon on American Idol...they aren't quite happy until they have thrown a monkey wrench onto the scene.
This is hot and I wouldn't change a thing! Very sensual and a great thing to think about.

[Too Simple a Simon]

Short & sexy. A suggestion? Changing "Feel her lips upon my navel" to something like "Moist lips upon my navel" removes the obvious female reference and makes the piece more universal - boy on girl, girl on boy, boy on boy, girl on girl.

Just a thought. T'SaS

[Robert A. Pacheco]

Very sexual. I loved it.
Thanks for posting.

[Marie]

Wonderfully erotic, without over-powering, like me work...LOL. Great job.