The Season of Death

I used to believe that autumn was the season of death

When everything I cared for seemed to wither and die

Leaving me with a sense of loneliness and sadness

That burrowed into my soul and stayed year after year

Sitting outside, watching the leaves fall to the ground

Knowing I could do nothing to make summer last forever

 

But my views have since altered and you are the reason

You changed the way that I experience and live my life

My soul can finally rest from the years of torture it endured

And it is all thanks to your patience and the love we share

Winter will soon be coming, but I have no more worries

For I know you will be there with me until the end of time

 

Reviews

[Titus McGuire]

This has a very good flow to it and I like the description, especially autumn being the season of death...I liked that, and how you continued the first verse to explain that reason and your feelings. 'Knowing I could do nothing to make summer last forever'...also a very well written line, and seems to give the idea that you are talking about more than just seasons, but life itself. I think the opening and ending lines of each verse are the most powerful in this piece.

[crap]

This is a very accessible poem, my only suggestion is that I wanted to be hit with a little more imagery, especially after line 2. maybe describe something in autumn that "withers and dies". only a personal preference though. nice job.

[CLUTZ]

Never give up hope, even when someone leaves. If they didn't stay, u didn't need them. they weren't good for you. very nice.

[Haley Smith]

Wow! This is absolutely beautiful. It's also really profound and hits you when you read it. Thanks loads and keep up the good work, I love this.

[Broken Warrior]

Beautiful, touching, emotional, pleasant, and so much more. Keep it up!

[The Tao of Bri]

Devotion of True Love is the most powerful energy in the world~akin straight fro the cosmos...Universally.. and this is such a brilliant dipcition of how that Knowing can effect and change our lives...WONDERFUL! So happy for you!

[lAcEy_LoO's Poems Site]

thats very pretty... i liked it.;.. keep up the work