purple hue

Little bit of my mind tonight...

(Lonely is this phone keypad)

(Lonelier by the minute)

passing people living, light, aimless

They have no barriers

No privacy, shameless

(Back to writing of my thoughts of things)

I have counted 23 heartstrings

staked to moist black soil

west of here

stringy strung attachment

and right now I desire to

BOARD A FERRY HEAR THE BUZZ OF TIRES ON THE GRATED RAMP

Walk the decks

face the salty humid wind

take in the calm of Georgia STRAIGHT

sailboats passing by

(Keypad touch screen)

(Tick tuck tuck tuck tick...)

think of old typewriters too

Not as much as I think of you

and how this planet of water and dust

Spins, spun out

Please

slash the bonds that broke these strings

Mastering the Sweating of smaller things

I want to see your garden BLOOMING

worked by my hand

LOOKING AT LOOMING

clouded and shadowed land

chives in the windowsill

(NO LONGER LONELY AS THE PHONE DIES OUT)

(Finish this piece and what it's about)

WANTING TO co-GROW eggplant

Simply for the purple hue

(Aubergine)

So full of me

to be full of you

Author's Note

This one is really crazy... Gotta come back to rethink the structure and the flowS

Reviews

[Steven]

(Lonely is this phone keypad)
(Lonelier by the minute)

Damn, that's really good.. And then I love the sensory perceptions piling up, only to be whisked away by (Tick tuck tuck tuck tick...)

Tech gets in the way, when everything living is dynamic, "warm."

"So full of me to be
full of you"

Yes, the possibilities between two.. Great piece

[Michael G. Smith]

It does get a bit confusing. The different themes do not transition easily. I do love the eggplant purple.

[Todd Mc' Callough]

at first I was confused to see the short lines and odd order of random words, but after reading it, the system made complete sense. Very well done. It gets better as you go along. Try to develop the flow in the beginning. Otherwise excellent work.

[Marc]

You made something that was perfect and made it even better! Well done, I have goosebumps.