A Better Tomorrow

A Better Tomorrow

I would want a better tomorrow.

A tomorrow that everyone would want to borrow.

A successful gain,

That was the result of pain.

I won't forget my yesterday,

Because it taught me the value of everyday.

From these I learned,

And success was earned.

Now that I started it,

No one else will end it.

I know it's shallow,

But my dream is a better tomorrow.

Author's Note

It's very short but I hope you like it. :)

Reviews

[Quiana Shakia]

short, sweet and to the point..!!! i like it...def can relate

[quinfinn]

short, sweet and to the point, but expressive to the fullest and cleverly composed to present a perfect wish for humanity and nature. very nice poem.

[everything inbetween]

That was very good and it spoke a lot of the truth. I liked it a lot!

[Michael]

I liked it very much.
who cares how short it is,
its whats written that matters,
not how much is written.

[An Ordinary Woman]

It is a shorty but it's well written and sweet, certainly not shallow.
I think your a fabulous young poet. Great job!


I likey.

[J.M]

That's not shallow at all, and its actually a really good poem, and definitely a nice thing to wish for. I also envy you your ability to write upbeat cheerful poetry well, which is something i struggle with. Thanks for sharing this.

[iamkim]

wow! this one is really great! good job :)

[Gone.]

ummm i dont know how to review a poem but its real good. i like it and i dont think a dream for a better tomorrow is shallow, its freakin awsome!!!!

[Jim Parson]

Lovely! Short and sweet and powerful! You've said much with few words. Well done!