Tea Cup Kettle

Just a moment of Randomness

Summer in the night tide spin

Looking backwards leaning on the wind

Mouth moving I can’t hear the sin

 

Floating on a back drop out of the rain

Snap pictures feel the flame

Thirsty soda air pop anorexic pup

All I want is mud penny throat candy

Uneasy… picture… mother

 

Summer in the night tide spin

Author's Note

Let me know what you think

Reviews

[Extant]

"leaning on the wind", sometimes the only thing we can lean on. I do not let people take pictures of me anymore, and all the pictures that existed of me have been 'lost'. . . That's one thing I have a connection to, "Snap pictures feel the flame". The whole poem fits together strangely and it seems like you could still remove some lines, have them separate and they could stand alone perfectly well.

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

I'll keep that in mind for future writes, maybe I'll separate the lines as a revised version.

[Extant]

Quality over quantity, right? No matter, great write.

[MOON]

Emotional write love the first three lines and floating on the backdrop out of the rain quite a picture you paint. Lovely

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

thank you very much

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Great flow to this poem...nice work, keep it up :)

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

thank you

[kublakhan27]

The first three lines are awesome...the images look random when you first lay your eyes on it, but as you read through it, they come together to paint a pretty emotional picture.