Coeptus

redemption in a sort of way

I am the weight of the world

Wrapped up in a meal replacement bar

Covered in filth

Naked

Smoking marijuana

Barrel boys loving in a cave

While a stud impregnates someone else’s wife

 

I am a walking talking Sodom

A naïve breeding Gemorah

Paying for my crimes every day

Eternity of payment

 

Cant say should have

No would have

Just too late

 

Not hard to live but I turned it down

Pain is my only comfort

 

Pain

Pain

Pain

Reviews

[tamsin]

This makes me feel grim, and dirty...which is WONDERFUL : D You have a real skill at making the reader feel the environment you place them in.

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

thank you that means a lot to me

[MOON]

Great write.

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

thank u

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Don't know who else would use 'meal replacement bar' in a poem

great stuff :)

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

lol always looking for new ways to express, if not me than who, thank you for your kind words

[Anne Timmins]

Good job, a very enjoyable read. It held my attention the whole time.

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

nice, I'm glad you enjoyed it.