Killer Poet

this is going to be in my school's literary magazine

Sometimes listening to your poetry

is like being hit with an avalanche of emotion.

The frozen snow covers me,

suffocates me,

blinds me

until I can’t find my way free.

Reviews

[Beau Peyton]

I like it, too. But I think I'd drop "emotion." I think it's clear that's what you're being hit with, and "avalanche" is a much more powerful word. I'm not sure you even have to use "me" after "suffocates" and "blinds". Those words are strong, well chosen, and stand on their own.
I love this kind of stuff. Short and powerful. This has real potential....

[pinpen]

Simply wonderful, enjoyed this alot.

[Emerald Seas]

Great writing, Lexy! Love the first two lines

[Whiskurz]

I like this.....Good write.....Whisk