Said The Fly...

Spin for me a web slyly…

From the lustrous silk

In your fulsome belly

A web so soft and slick

I bury myself sinfully

In thick, diaphanous depths

Forgetting, I am but prey

Confused, blinded deeply

By the toxins you spray

Upon my naked, tender skin

In the supple web you spin

Better than Machiavelli

Spin for me a web slyly…

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Love the metaphor here. Beware poor fly of that spider. She spins to trap, to control and then to totally consume. Yes, I do believe there are a few women out there who would do that. There are also a lot of men who would fall for it. Great write AJ. Don't be one that gets entrapped.

Chris

[AJNJ]

Thanks a ton Ms. Chris! I agree about the seductive power of some ladies! And yes yes, I always try to keep my senses about me. Intellect and not intrigue is what turns me on any day. Thanks a ton for such a great review!

[Orange]

Maybe coz only fly will be trapped.
no idea Indeed is art, but how would anyone ever describe any lady like that, unless the poison only in your head.

[AJNJ]

Ohhhh....but this is only about a spider, my friend! A lady spider, you know....I wouldn't dare describe a real lady like that 😊 The perception lies with the reader. I leave it to them totally. Thank you for your comment anyway!

[Orange]

I am sorry for my attitude,
it has been for many years, because of the wisdom and beauty of a girl.
Let those who does not know her at all, speak of her as the source of all darkness, do you know this is very unfair,
false kindness, and true kindness, there is really no difference from the outside,
but if really worth it .
why don’t you walk in and see the real colour of what, why listen to other or your own fearsz
Only look outside to see things good and bad, is this too provincial

[AJNJ]

I understand you point only too well. One must weigh people and things from their own perspective and not that which is imposed on them by others. I'm glad you shared your views here. Thanks a ton...

[barleygirl]

I really love a man that's willing to dive into a prolific 70's bush . . . not shy about the vermin & toxins that may be musty-harbored therein. Yes, yes, yes. Your poem exudes sexuality and yet your actual descriptions are so far from the typical erotic fare, that's what makes it so startling, that this perfectly describes a muff dive as well as a buzzing bonk in the web. I feel very much outshined by all the fiesty youngsters who are jamming the Halloween essence into places I never thought about finding it, despite my years of reading & writing Halloween ditties. I'm going to have to step up my game becuz this is the most amazing Halloween year I've seen in 6 years at the cafe! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[AJNJ]

An ancient bush is to be revered and not feared and makes me think of all the treasures buried therein hahaha. Thinking of Halloween, this year does have a spookier air to it which may be fuelling our creative mojos terrifically! So here's to some great fun Halloween poetry writing time Ms. Barley! Thanks a ton and more for this utterly fabulous review! A big hug from me!

[Jimmy Yetts]

Flirting with danger
There are" flies" who can't think of a more pleasant way to go.
There are "spiders" who take such alluring form.
What a web they weave--most pleasant peril!

[AJNJ]

Never seen a fly refuse, Aye sir, I absolutely agree! 'Tis definitely a peril most pleasant! Thanks a ton for the great comment!

[JMichael]

Those pesky web weavers, huh? I sure am familiar with them. Quite a few here, too! It's an unfortunate ill of being a poet; some use the skill for manipulative means, always preying and lulling the naive flies with silken words and trapping them in those very webs you write of. Always keep a heavy boot handy to squash the little buggers. An eloquent way to make a serious point, AJ. A great read, this.

[AJNJ]

There are writing websites and then there's Tindr lolololo. People often get the two confused lolololo. Thanks a ton for an insightful comment sir Brilliance!

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Next time you feel like a fly, call me pronto! I love catching and cooking spiders especially the big female Tarantulas with huge, fat bellies. Lots of s**t in them. Jokes aside, this is a really visual poem AJ. Just the way I like them.

[AJNJ]

Hairy tarantulas are especially scary lol. Ever tried chewing on one? Thanks for the bodyguard offer. I can only pay you in fishes haha. Thanks a ton for always reviewing Ms. Kat 🌹

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I adopted you, puppy. You're welcome 😹

[AJNJ]

*Barks and chases the kat* bowowbowow

[Marina]

The spider as an eight legged symbol of machiavellianism.....such a wonderful idea here, AJNJ. Just as the spider weaves its web slyly, so too do many humans of the manipulative kind. They weave their web of words, draw in the unsuspecting prey and then pounce when the time is right. Its a far more common trait than most suspect and it's present in all facets of society. You have poetically conveyed this philosophy so well that even the reader can be lulled slyly with the gentle poesy of your words and description. It's a poem that works on many levels for me and makes it a wonderful read. Well written, AJNJ. 💛

[AJNJ]

I read today that the web is made shiny, silky soft and alluring for the prey on purpose and its tensile strength is greater than steel to make escape impossible. This struck me and set my scribbling. Thanks a ton Ms. Marina! I agree absolutely about those hypnotic yet sly humans!