People that hate

people say love yourself, admire yourself

and respect yourself like i do.

but when they get home and 

lay their eyes upon themselves 

they say oh i hate myself 

why am i so ugly, fat and stupid 

well i yell hypocrite at once 

and point my finger at them in shame 

well i say don't love yourself and respect yourself

for nothing you don't deserve such flattery

but don't despise your self as you have done 

nothing wrong so far 

i say despise yourself if you have done no good

flatter when you have done 

a good deed and as for other people 

that depress me all the haters and the laughers 

you go on destroying dreamers of

the triers and the makers but know 

that you are destroying a bright future 

with them ,and for what a lonely laugh 

well let me make it clear 

life is not for laughter its for work and its that dark life of yours 

that ends with sadness and sorrow 

anyone who gets away from your 

previous tormenting they are the people that you will follow

as the small pathetic being you are  

they will be remembered, loved and cherished 

as you will parish in silence with no tear 

or a thought people just wouldn't care.

Don't despise others just ‘cos they are weird because weird is better and weird is future!!

Author's Note

please ignore grammar problems, and give me constructive criticism to improve my work .

Reviews

[Mishael H.]

From that depress me...to ...let me make it clear it seems a little confused. Also why did you say life is for work not laughter?

There's a bunch of grammatical/spelling materials and conceptually it's a little unclear/hard to follow but I think it's a great first draft! I think you started off really well, I was enjoying it, but then you kind of jump around between informal/formal writing and it gets a little confusing.

Great job!!