Atomic

That day,

The night grew cold,

For the bright moon,

Did not show,

For that night the land and sky,

Were drenched in blood,

The blood of man,

The blood of steeds,

The buildings did not crumble,

They merely left,

Unable to withstand,

The faces of those still left,

Would fall

No bones to bury

No screams were heard,

For death had taken the land.

Author's Note

Let me know what you think.

Reviews

[sithlordjp]

When we think back on those events, we see the mushroom cloud on that old news reel. But underneath, there were people. People just going about their day. Not caring about war or politics. "No bones to bury: indeed, erased from History...

Excellent writing. Your words are precise and sharp.

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you for all your great reviews.

[Mark Anthony Games (Hum..]

Review for Change the World Comp

Interesting work, I wonder if 'The building did not crumble, they merely vanished' would work better?, I thought this was one of the most important lines in this work. They act as a pivot to show the magnitude of our mistakes. Magnificent write, well done

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

WW-2

[AWickedMoon]

Yes it is.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Horrible!
With wonderful words you described the horror of a moment in time!
I loved your topic.
If it is what i think it is!

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you, and im curious what do you think it is?

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

world war 2?

[IndigoChild]

Interesting but i dont understand how the title and the context connect?

[AWickedMoon]

Thankyou, Its about an atomic bomb.

[KAOlmsted]

Doomy. Is that a word? I highly doubt it, but it really fits ;-)

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you for all the wonderful comments!

[KAOlmsted]

My pleasure.

[Darkening Shadow]

Lots of detail nice job!

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you.

[Calibaster]

Wow, that really paints a morbid picture, but it paints it excellently. Great job! :)

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you. :)

[Lucien Maier]

dark. but great descriptions. the piece has a very haunting quality

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you for all your great reviews!