The Day when Every One stood still

This is a haiku relating to the day before Eid Al Adha.

Man with hands raised

With tears rolling down his face

Asked for blessings

Author's Note

Please put forward you suggestions. I am new to this site and I don't have any friends. So, if you could review mine, I shall review yours.

Reviews

[The XYZ Writer]

I'm with Seema down there. A great, meaningful poem, but the structure is wrong. Follow her suggestions.

But great job on one of your first haikus! :)

[Abdur Raqeeb]

I think the number of syllables are alright. I checked with
http://www.wordcalc.com/index.php before posting it.

[Forever Hidden]

A haiku ( as you know ) is a poem in three lines of five syllables, seven, and then again five syllables.

You did pretty good in the second sentence, but not the first and last. I think that the fist sentence has four syllables, and the last sentence is the same. Please correct me if I am wrong though! ^__^

Besides the mistakes, I never knew you out of all people you could write like this! XD

[Abdur Raqeeb]

Thank you for your review.. I think the number of syllables are alright. I re confirmed with:
http://www.wordcalc.com/index.php

[Abdur Raqeeb]

Sometimes people can surprise you!! xD

[Forever Hidden]

Take your hands and clap them every time there is a syllable break. Or speak it out and clap your hands every time there is a syllable break.

Hope that helps!

[Emily B]

it is exquisite

I went and read about Eid Al Adha, and found Abraham and Hagar who I studied in the old testament.

[Abdur Raqeeb]

Thank You!