Not With You

A poem about fading love, and also finding a new partner

Roses are red and violets are blue,
Yes I'm in love,but not with you.
Should've told me from the start,
Instead of going around breaking my heart.

You told your friends how you made me cry,
How you left me high and dry,
How you kept on breaking my trust
Go ahead and say it,if you must

Yeah you can go around saying how you played me,
But what goes around comes around girl you'll see.
Now I got a new girlfriend and she's nothing like you.
And yes I'm in love but not with you.

Reviews

[Rachael]

I like how you started with the over-said and over-used statement that roses are red and violets are blue, and how you repeated the line, "Yes I'm in love, but not with you."

The whole poem flows well, and you did a nice job describing everything that went on.

[Poetic Beauty]

this poem is a story everyone likes to sing when we are starting a new relationship and leaving the past behind. Most of us can relate to this situation. I love the flow of the poem.

[Anna Kay]

very good! i LOVE how u rymed it really flowd

[Veronica]

I liked how this had a good flow to it, and like someone else said, I could also feel the music lyrics behind the poem. It also proves you are good with writing since you turned the beginning of a little poem into a verse poem.

[Nayan]

Love it Anubhav! Rhyme is perfect and flow beautiful, way of expression of anger (perhaps) lovable!

[Moth Phoenix]

I agree with Krissy, seems like lyrics more than a poem. It's a great poem/song. :D
I love it!!!
Great job!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

A simple old rhyme still can work in poetry. I like the movement and the story. A wise person know when to run and when to stay. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Krissy]

This seems more like song lyrics than a poem (which is actually better, because I can practically hear the music behind the words.) It's angsty, and it really shows a person how heartbreak will make you feel like crp at first, but you have to rise above it, and move on. Kudos!