Onward

Today I merge with flowers in bloom

the earth holds me like a mother's womb

the weather is patient and I have time

to ebb effortlessly so free from my mind

Full spirited I race across the plains

graceless skies consume my daze 

the spark inside my heart alight 

ignited from the ruins of my plight

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nice moving forward kind of poem...good use of slant rhyme...

a couple spots...did you mean "mother's womb" and "plains"

i like the "merging with flowers in bloom" because it indicates the speaker is blooming again...rising from the ashes, so to speak...

short but powerful.

[Wraith.]

Ah, corrected them now, I haven't had much sleep. Thank you :)

[Rim]

" Graceless skies consume my daze " Brilliant , loved every word , picturesque and amazing

[Wraith.]

:) thankyou

[willweb]

Extremely uplifting. I feel good after reading your poem today.

[Wraith.]

That makes today a good day for me again then.

[Aethereal]

But for a few grammatical errors, I enjoyed your poem very much. I was inspire to use some of your words to write my own version of your poem which you may keep as a gift. It’s in 0/1/0/1/0/1/0/1/0 nine syllable meter. 1 = stress; 0 = non-stress.

Season of Healing

Today I merge with flowers in bloom.
The Earth holds me in her natal womb.
Unflustered weather gives me the time
to free my mind, and let my dreams climb.

Full spirited I race o’er wide plains.
Majestic skies release all my pains.
Fires deep in my heart soon burst with bright
sparks from the charred remains of my plight.

[Wraith.]

My whole page of poetry is just an accumulation of my drafts, ideas, spontaneous feelings and brainwaves before I sleep. They are unrefined and I often go back to change bits now and then.

Thank you none the less.

[Aethereal]

I know. And they are inspiring too. Keep writing bits and pieces of your life, for that's what poetry's all about, spontaneous serendipitous combustion.