Sonnet VII – Demure sun of Galway

A tribute to Ireland, Galway and Snoozels Hostel.

On footsteps of my deplorable fate,

I follow letting faith lead my dark way,

And I opened my eyes one day quite late,

Amid the monsoon standing at Galway.

 

Polychrome sight aligned in horizon,

Grey skies and blue seas robed in coat of green,

My soul then fled from its dark old dungeon,

And embraced the demure sun in paean.

 

Unsung feelings saw light and learned a tune,

My heart danced under perpetual rain,

My past bid peace and did leave me alone,

For once I abandoned my pool of pain.

 

But seraphic times e'er elude and fleet,

A flake of me is still at Forster Street.

 

Author's Note

A beautiful memory!

Reviews

[LA Lorena]

I love the rhyme, and your dedication to the sonnet form. I kind of wondered about the font choice too. Of course, the decision on what font you prefer is yours to make, I just wonder if a 'softer' font may actually be the key to making your writing more subtly beautiful. This gothic font appears a little harsh IMO. I would love to see you experiment a little with another font style.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you, LA
and thank you for the remarki'll consider it

[Tarry Franck]

You do some amazing writing! Keep up the great work!

[DarkRainbowPie]

Living not too far from Galway myself, this poems paints a picture that I see nearly everyday x'D Nicely written, and nice to know Galway seems to have left an impression on you, haha :')

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

thank you!
I once said only Irish people would understand what i meant by
'Perpetual rain' and 'demure sun' lol

[DarkRainbowPie]

Haha, very well said x'D

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

lol

[Dalia]

Loved the beautiful colors this sonnet's words draw, a flow of a lovely memory is the best thing one could ever have

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

thanks, Dalia

[KeeD]

Demure sun of Galway the title is amazing, drew me in straight away.
I love the rhyme and the way you write poetry, and I agree with Lorena on the soft font if that would be something you would consider, just because I feel it would suit the structure of a sonnet better :) Much respect this was great

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

I am not home now... In another county!
but i promise you to see different fonts when i get back to my dear laptop
cant write without it lol

[vspjaguar]

Shedding all the pains and singing unsung tunes; A beautiful memory indeed.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

it is indeed!

[Lonesome Traveler]

This conjures up old memories of Galway Bay for a few years back, and that o so "perpetual rain"!! Lovely if you catch a sunset though, makes me want to visit Ireland.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Only those who's been to Galway will understand "perpetual rain" and "Demure sun"
thank you :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am not big on all caps...

but the content is beautiful...this is quite a series of poems...

so expressive and visual..and with an old time poetic feel to them.

jacob

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you, Jacob
but these are not cabs, might notice if looked closer, its a font called
read moreThank you, Jacob
but these are not cabs, might notice if looked closer, its a font called
"Copperplate Gothic Light" my favorite!

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

or maybe i didnt get your point!!?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh okay...they look like caps...

anyway, i do like the poems..

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you again!
Means alot coming from you
I am writing a new book, my forth actually, its gonna be all sonnets :)

[Night]

Now this was a good write...beautiful in it's flow and message...well done my friend.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you... Much honored!

[Night]

You're very welcome...=)