Sonnet XXV – Land of snow and sorrow

I am sorry... But I am locked, fain :)

Maybe pain will dissolve with tears of stars

Maybe night will unveil a bright morrow

Maybe time would fain heal my open scars

But I belong in the land of snow and sorrow

 

Perhaps light is as warm as I have heard

Perhaps it’s a place to fill my hollow

Bosom bereaved, pained with tales untold

But I belong in the land of snow and sorrow

 

Where the snowflakes cover my skin and eyes

And sorrow-flakes burden my heart and mind

Where my past, present and hereafter lies

Beneath its stars, twisted comfort I find

 

In the weeping land of snow and sorrow

On arms of winter alone I hollo

Author's Note

This Sonnet is a relic for me... what do you think?

Reviews

[Disregarded]

Wow..It's way deeper than I can imagine..Nothing's true on this world, in fact the truth is not even there, pureness is just vastly overrated, people hunger for it yes, but when they have it within their grasp they detest it as if it were the most wretched thing, leaving the bidder with nothing but woe, sorrow and nothing but the peak of melancholy.

[Ohhhwillow]

I like the way this begins, with ambiguity. Subconsciously perhaps you write structured stanza ad a way of making sense of your sorrow, or perhaps you in fact are more in control than you realise! This is very stunning. 100/100

[s y e]

This one stands out. Very nicely written !

" I am sorry... But I am locked, fain :)
Maybe pain will dissolve with tears of stars
Maybe night will unveil a bright morrow
Maybe time would fain heal my open scars
But I belong in the land of snow and sorrow"

Loved this stanza, it was amazing!!!! I think this is my favourite sonnet from you, Adam.

[Britt]

I think this one is my favorite out of all the ones I have read by you so far. This one stands out to me. Nice job. :P

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

As I said in my note... this one represent a relic for me
thanks, glad you liked it that much

[Monster ^.^]

Letting go of what you grew up in is truly difficult. But we have to learn! Your character is still well to develop, but the sonnet in itself is complete :)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Indeed my friend! this is the main naked idea of the sonnet :)

[Dalia]

this one is even better, the sincere feelings in it makes it more close to the reader to understand and relate, I had this vision of the loner in the snow where snowflakes are covering him up, great poem.
"I belong to the land of snow and sorrow" loved this line :)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you, Dalia