Untitled as of now

Please comment on whether you want the next chapter or not. This is an unfinished work, but I promise it's a long one. I recently changed it from first person to third person limited. If you do notice anything, like grammar problems, in-proper word use etc. please say so; I'd like to make this spotless. I do have a couple chapters ready to go if people want more, well if ENOUGH people want more. Thanks for the help and enjoy! =)