Delicate

Love

 

is the breeze  

that caresses your

skin when you

wake up after a deep slumber

 

the reason for the

ascendance and the beauty

 

death and the new sunrise

 

is born from nothing.   

 

Author's Note

So what do you think?

A.M.

Reviews

[Larissa G.]

So short and so fragile and thought out...

I was a bit thrown off by the lines:
"the reason for the

ascendance and the beauty"

Because the first stanza had no punctuation, it was obvious that they flew into the next.
However, then those lines seem to be the end of the statement you started in the first stanza.

In other words: punctuation is a useful thing, I think it's needed here.

Otherwise - fantastic.

[Joe]

You did a good job. Short, yet profound. Good luck in my contest. ~ Joe

[Christopher 'Windstorm'..]

as fragile as love is well done!

[yinseriv]

There is a flow to these words that pay a tender harmony to the title. I can feel the soft breeze. I feel the delicate rift between death and the new sunrise. The poem placed me within a moment and leaves me smiling as I watch the moment drift away.

[Marie]

Excellent flow. I do not think that punctuation is needed in ths piece. Nicely done.

[Emily B]

I've not seen the lace that could compare with the fragile beauty of these brilliant words.

[MandarinOranges]

Somethings are out of our control, like who we fall in love with and when it's time to go. Yes, that's from a song, a good one two, but nearly as good as this!

[Angelic Darkness]

This is a delicate poem:). Love and death go hand in hand...neither
we have control of. AD

[JadedSparrow]

In so few words, you bring a profound message. This is a prime example that a poem doesnt have to be drawn out to grab you by the heart. Great write.

JS

[The Dark Priest]

Death and the new sunrise is born from nothing...
A different approach but I like it.
Well written ;)