MY WISH

Beauty never looks at the face,
But through the heart.
It speaks the word's out of fear,
Only for the heart that know it worth.

Never to give up despite the troubles coming in double,
My heart glows more even when darkness comes,
Ready to see your smiling face.

Even with distance,my connection to you is strong.
One can't say if it's a spell or not.
The sweetness of love filled in my mouth like honey,
Delightful as I have found someone i could keep like treasure.

The sound of your name brings peace,
Your beauty is no match,
When i look at others.

You draw the attention of men,
Just with the calmness of your voice,
Together with your smile so pleasant and cool like the moon,
Intoxicating like an alcohol.

Just a single wish i ask,
Happiness to my heart be granted,
Please don't break my heart .

Reviews

[747]

Yes, how often we wish only to not be hurt by the ones we hand our heart to.

I saw a couple minor errors; uncapitalized 'I' s, extra/forgotten spaces, minor grammar.

Your phrasing is lovely, giving beautifully clear description. Your poem embraces a touching sentiment that many of us feel, wonderfully done.

[Wannabewriter16]

This is awesome. I can feel everything that you are feeling as you are writing. That means you are doing an amazing job! Please keep writing and never stop.

[richieb]

Ahhh! the pleading love of beauty within transcending to physical virtues. Men willing to sell their soul for a single kiss and caress only to be left betrayed and heartbroken. {Sometimes}. Thank you, Daniel Richie B.

[Daniel]

Lols Just love beyond beauty

Thank you Richie B.

[Richard Patrick]

The poem allows us to the beauty of your words. It shows us, that beauty is not blind. It sees our souls as we grow. The things that is loved, is beauty. Your delicate words have brought the reader to know what they must do to see the beauty. There is always beauty if you look at the delicacy of the woman you love. It is in the heart and soul of each of us. We must eternalize it to see it. The man or woman who does not tickle your heart still has beauty within them.

[Daniel]

Thank you Richard Patrick

Everything we love is beautiful despite the shape or size but nevertheless heart break is not encouraging Lolz.

[Cyndy Robinson]

"Just a single wish i ask, Happiness feeling my heart if granted, Please don't break my heart." How true and don't we all wish that when we enter into a relationship. Nicely done.

[Daniel]

Our wish and prayer is never to be heart broken by those we tend to love, A perfect relationship is worth demanding beyond beauty.

Thank you Candy

[Daniel]

Our wish and prayer is never to be heart broken by those we tend to love, A perfect relationship is worth demanding beyond beauty.

Thank you Candy

[TheMalady]

Hi! This is a wonderful poem! The message is heart-warming! I would like to offer some friendly suggestions to improve this nice piece: (Optional)

-'It speaks the word's out of fear...' Should be - '...It speaks the words out of fear...'

-'Delightful as have found someone i could keep like treasure...' Should be '...Delightful as I have found someone I could keep like a treasure...'

-' Happiness feeling my heart if granted,' Should be '...Happiness to my heart be granted..'

Just a suggestion, because I'm a bit of confused in the last second line. Just my thoughts, however, it lies to you my friend. :)

[Daniel]

I appreciate your constructive idea which will enable me to improve more.

Thank you

[TheMalady]

You're very welcome! Glad to be of service! :)