Waves

Once a naive child
Sought after the sea
To feel as vivid blue
As the depths of it

Ventured in too far
Got swallowed by a wave
Trapped into the waters
Dissolving into them

Hence why I have no body
No place to keep my soul
Passed on all my sorrows
To waves crashing on the shore

Reviews

[Boring~Potato]

This poem delves into the tragic consequences of a naive child's curiosity and the dangers of the sea. The vivid imagery of the child being swallowed by a wave and trapped in the waters is hauntingly beautiful yet incredibly sorrowful. The idea of passing on sorrows to the crashing waves evokes a sense of longing and despair.

The creativity in this piece is super, as it takes a simple concept and spins it into a deep and thought-provoking narrative. The metaphor of the sea as a metaphor for life and death is executed brilliantly, leaving the reader with a sense of unease and contemplation.

Overall, this poem is a powerful exploration of innocence lost and the harsh realities of the world. It is a reminder of the fragility of life and the relentless power of nature. Highly recommended for those who appreciate poetry that pushes boundaries and delves into the darker aspects of the human experience.

[Adriana]

Wow that is one of the best comments I've gotten thank youu:). Your review is very thoughtful, I'm grateful to receive it!

[Joli Dy]

Deceptively simple. I especially loved, "to feel as vivid blue as the depths of it"
The ending seems almost tao-esque in its dissolution of self to the waves.
This is a gem.

[Adriana]

Thanks for the thoughtful review