The sun, the sea, the sky and the shore

The sun an ice cream ball in warm sky, melts
The sea goes swallows sun whole turning red
The sky drips murky yellow to a black
The shore cold, laying under bare feet grows

Author's Note

Ok Ik this isn't good but is it Iambic pentameter? It's my first attempt at it, please tell me if I actually did it right lol

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

It's visual, that's for sure.. and almost perfectly. Maybe read up and then slightly change it. Am by no means an expert - but, you will be!

[Adriana]

Thx so much for the review^-^