Did You Ever

A rhyming nonet telling of a crazed mood.

         Did You Ever?       ( rhyming nonet )

 

Did  you ever have one of those days
  when you find yourself in a daze
     caught in life's tortuous maze

      with nothing good to praise,
         trapped in a brain haze,
           eyes locked in phase
                 with a crazed 
                   and glazed
                       gaze?

Reviews

[Abdul Aziz]

Did I ever? I've been in the throes of mild depression and inactivity so often these days that this is what my mind ever sees. But when reason wrests back the initiative, I find myself feeling a little more optimistic. A nice structure, too. Kind of like an inverted etheree! I'm myself a fan of etherees, and I've written a rhymed one a few years ago. Here's the link if you ever want to have a glance!
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/abdulrocks/567718/

Thank you for this excursion into rhymed poetry, albeit with a depressing subject!

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your intricate comment, Abdul! There's much to be depressed about these days. We can't do much to change our world, but we do have the power to change how we react to it. I took note of your link which should make for some good reading. When we're depressed it's good to take a look at ourselves from outside of ourselves through a poem about it, or through a picture such as the depressed yellow dog placed with my poem. When we watch or sanity, we have control over it.

[Rita L. Sev]

I think this is how my students feel when I'm droning on about the joys of grammar... This is an interesting format that took some skill. Excellent rhyme, and clever wording!

[Aethereal]

Thanks, Rita! Why don't you drive your students as crazy as that orange dog in the picture by having them write perfect rhyming nonets that make sense and produce inverted triangles. All rhyme words must also be perfect matches, and a different rhyme word must be at the end of each line. You may show them mine as an example.

[Rita L. Sev]

I just might do that. Although I think I put them through enough this year when I made them each write a sonnet... some of them are still walking around counting syllables!

[icelandicblue]

An interesting form and rhyme scheme. And yes to all of the above. Thanks for the read.

[Aethereal]

Thanks, icelandicblue! You won't find many rhyming nonets about. Mine is the only one that I know of. There are nonets, but no rhyming nonets that use the same rhyme sound in a perfect match in a poem that makes sense. A near perfect inverted triangle must also be made. I won't be trying to write another one any time soon.

[icelandicblue]

I have seen this format before and you are right I have never seen it in rhyme. I didn't realize that the lines had to be placed so that they created a near perfect inverted triangle. They usually just indent inversely down to the last word.

[Aethereal]

If you study my other poems, you'll also find that they are the only such in the world. My rhymes are perfect matches, and I only use a rhyming word once in a single poem. I also follow perfect meter. I try to do things with poetry that no one else ever has, things that some people would consider impossible.

[Muse]

I stumbled upon this by accident. I'm glad I did..very charming.

[Aethereal]

Thanks, Cobra! Sometimes we find charming goldfishs hid within a vast ocean.

[Muse]

yes..yes we do!

[popourii]

Yes I do, mostly when I'm having to suffer writer's block lol. Thank you for sharing with us :)

[Aethereal]

Thanks, popourii!

[Akshat♥]

If i am in this situation than i get totally bored :D
Short and interesting piece..
I had those kind of days...
Keep writing!!

[Aethereal]

Thanks, Akshat!

[Akshat♥]

You are always welcome dear:)
Akshat