Pleasure

This my attempt at a love poem. This is inspired by Hafiz's love poems. This isn't about anyone in general. Let me know what you think. I usually don't write love poems.

Pleasure

Lets revel in the pleasure my dear
The sheer pleasure of touch
The sheer pleasure of a kiss
Lets moan together tonight
Connecting in pleasure
Allowing our bodies
To flow and to writhe
Out of sheer pleasure alone
Let us come together in pleasure
Pleasing just for the sake of pleasing
Touching simply because it feels good
Not caring what others might think
Lets revel in pleasure tonight my dear
Pleasuring each other
Simply because it feels good
To pleasure you my dear

Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

I think the word pleasure and its variation was a little overdone.

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Decent. I personally like the other love poem more but this is good as well. I like the line: Pleasing just for the sake of pleasing.

[Mia]

This seems more like a passion poem than a love poem, I enjoyed it none the less. I liked "sitting in love" slightly more.

[Sunny Skye]

Pretty good. Maybe the word pleasure is a bit overused in this poem. But overall it's good. Well done.

-SkyeBlanco