The Crime

Darkness was all around 
Light shone from the corner 
Chalk lines on the ground

Many questions but no answer
Next to the strip club
Another fallen dancer

Blood stains and bullet holes
A complete mystery
A tragic lost soul 

Residents sleep if they can 
Could you? 
With the death of your fellow man?

With emotion it is still a crime
Thrill and suspense
Like a mountainous climb

It is crime
No, it is THE crime 

Author's Note

All right?

Reviews

[GridLok]

Great word-play in "Light shone from the corner / Chalk lines on the ground". I am left feeling unsure of the final intent.

Think that the succinct 'punchy style' is worth developing.

[Alan Brown]

Loved the style adopted and it flowed really well. As has been said the imagery was really vivid and scenes from The Wire were evoked in my mind. Great work

[Sarah W. French]

It was simple but full of passion. The words you wrote seemed to make a picture in my mind. Good job

[....]

Wow, i am impressed with your style, This is wonderful...xo

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

simple and flows perfectly, a tad realative for my liking but a great imagery lends to the subtly of the piece.

[Tasha]

Nice flow and very creative.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Very nice, flow is great and has depth in this little neat poem that is so great!!!