All Alone

Without you why should I live..

Without you how should I live..

 

The nights are longer than ever..

The days are longer than ever..

 

please come to me

my heart is saying to you

 

Again in the evening i am alone

again I am remembering you

again my heart is stopping

again you are giving me pain

 

In this heart I got lot of memories of you

Without you I am all alone..

 

please come to me

my heart is saying to you

 

so many things I have thought

so many dreams I have made

so many things my heart wants

so many desires I have made

 

through my heart a lot of disasters occur

Without you I can't live or even die

 

please come to me

my heart is saying to you

 

Without you why should I live..

Without you how should I live..

 

The nights are longer than ever..

The days are longer than ever..

 

please come to me

my heart is saying to you

 

Reviews

[.shalynn.009.]

I like the three two-line stanzas that are repeated in the beginning and the end of the poem, starting it out and bringing it back to that original idea. Again, I bring up the three symbolism of doom and the two symbolism of duality, both of which again seemed to work, though not quite as well as in the last poem I read of yours.

"through my heart lot of disasters occur" I think you meant "through my heart a lot of disasters occur" This is an interesting line, very powerful and destructive, which goes with the rest of the poem. You're quite good at coming up with unique metaphors like this.

"Without you I can't live or even die" I like this idea, that the speaker is stuck in place without the ability to control any aspect of his/her life. Without the person the speaker is thinking of, he/she is stuck in time. A very interesting line.

Overall, a powerful, emotional poem. Good job.

[taarini2307]

its BEAUTIFUL.

WOW


i love the depth and emotions and your play of words.

" so many things I have thought
so many dreams I have made
so many things my heart wants
so many desires I have made"

i love these lines

its beautifully written

i enjoyed the poem so much

keep it up!

[Akshat♥]

Thank you so much:)

[Ravyne Hawke]

Love the repetition in this poem.. it shows the mind of the invested interest... repeating the whys of the broken affair. Some nice imagery in this. Well done

[Akshat♥]

Thank you dear :)

[beautiful life]

so emotional

[Akshat♥]

thank you so much to review so many so fast :)

[Anuvart]

so sad,loved it:)

[JanieB]

This would be good as a song.

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

I think this is my favorite of all your writes. the repetition was great :)

[-Scribe in Style-]

A very nice poem.
Strength
Depth
Meaning
Feeling!
The cry of a hurting heart

[HorrorMaster]

another sad poem I like it

[Katannaism]

I like the emotion and the rawness of this. It also has this good description of a human's desire of another- Really good-Keep it up.

[Holly]

OML Sweetie you have evolved with writing so well, I knew you could do it, ye just needed some time to get into the flow of things :) Wonderful, wonderful job on this one! As always a wonderful read when I get to read ye work :)