Forget me

Forget me to ease your pain...

why two people close their eyes
when kissing?
Because they are so dazzled
by each other.
In that short moment
with my eyes closed...
I'll miss you.

 

 

I love you
Since the moment I saw you.
I'm sorry that I couldn't do
anything for you.

 

 

Forgiving... is giving your hate
just a little room in your heart.

 

 

How badly do I wish
to show you my heart!

 

 

You were the best thing
that ever happened to me.

 

 

How thankful I am to God
for having sent you as a gift to me.

 

 

I don't have to remember you.
You're a part of me.

 

 

I smile,laugh and smell like you do.
I might forget you,

Since I am loosing my memory
but nothing can drive you
out of my body.

Although you've never told me
you loved me...
I know deep in my heart
that you love me.

 

 

Forgive me for leaving you.
Please...

 

 

For the last time
I have a favor to ask.
forget me..

 

 

Reviews

[Dev]

This is a very emotional poem, and I for one liked it a lot. Technically a few things are here and there (I've taken the liberty to edit your poem but it's just as a reference guide. You don't have to make the changes if you don't want to.) The idea behind this write is very heart breaking; Losing a lover. Love isn't easy but I guess that's the way everything in life is.

Why do people close their eyes when kissing?
Because they're so dazzled by each other;
In that short moment, with my eyes closed, I miss you.

I have loved you
Since the moment I saw you.
I'm sorry that I couldn't do
anything for you.

Forgiving is giving your hate
Just a little room in your heart.

How badly do I wish to show you my heart!

You were the best thing that ever happened to me.

How thankful am I to God
For sending you as a gift to me.

I don't have to remember you;
You're a part of me.

I smile, laugh and smell like you do.
I might forget you,
Since I am losing my memory,
But nothing can drive you
Out of my body.

Although you've never told me you loved me,
I know deep in my heart that you do.

Forgive me for leaving you.

Please!


For the last time
I have a favor to ask,
Forget me.

[Tasha]

Wow, this was so amazing. I loved it so muuch...... outstanding job!!

[Holly]

Wow, I would have to say this one has to be my favorite one by you so far Hun. It reminds me of me own past where I had a good relationship and fear caused me to run away. It also helps to instill the resolution I have made to not run away from the good relationship I have once again with a very special someone who will always have me heart. As always wonderful reading your work. Keep up the great work, I look forward to reading more :)

[sushi]

The flow of emotions and the simple words that convey a heavy thought process, is wonderful. I am left speechless....

[Ginger]

Wow, a lot of emotion in this one. I love it, especially the ending. Outstanding work!

[Sweets]

This is awesome o.o
so sad and touching and beautiful o.o
the ending is really good :)

[Murtuza]

I'm deeply touched by the insecurities of the character about to depart from the world. He so deeply wants to let her know of his love for her, yet he is afraid to. Written with such passion and emotion. A good write. I was hooked till the end.

[Manda]

awww i loved this!!! awesome write!!

[.shalynn.009.]

"why two people close their eyes" Did you mean "Why do two people"?

"Since I am loosing my memory" I'm not sure if you meant "losing" or if you were saying the speaker was letting go of her memories by loosing them. If the latter was the case, it was a bit of a confusing way to say it.

In the second to last stanza, I loved how you changed the color of the word "please". It made it stand out starkly, emphasizing the word and adding to the emotion.

I think I've told you about the significance of the number three in literature, so I like that that was the number of lines in the last stanza. And I loved the context of the last stanza. Very heartfelt and emotional. I also love that it ended with an ellipse, leaving it unresolved.

The color yellow in literature can mean decay or sickness, which works for this, since neither the speaker nor the subject seem to be moving on or healing.

Another good write. I enjoy reading your stuff, so keep writing.