Numb

When we fall, we need lot of courage to stand up.. this poem shows the pain inside us...

 
         Huge scream

      Heavy noise

      High tension

      Large Illusion

      Long pain

      Little darkness

     Afraid to lose

     Taking risks

     Lot of Expectations

 

     Why I am afraid

     I don't know, I can't see

     I am my worst enemy

 

     You look around and all you see is hurt

     And I am the one who can't be saved

     Hiding myself behind the caves

     People asking me questions

     and I have nothing to enunciate

     Life is too short ,

     Lot of decisions to make

     Good things come to those who wait

     I am running out of space

     I stayed where my last step left me

     Maybe I am the one to blame

       Maybe we are all same...

 

Author's Note

Read it tell me what you think about it...
I have written a poem after a long time..
I hope you will like it:)

Reviews

[Frieda P]

This poem makes a lot of noise, and raises many questions....we are all one in the same, it takes courage to wake up in the morning and look at ourselves, just to breathe each day can be a challenge. I think you've connected the dots with this one! Nice....

[Akshat♥]

Thank you:)

[The dark story]

Why I am afraid
I don't know, I can't see
I am my worst enemy
i liked these lines the most.......it is really very depressing poem and the way you put it is seriously great....

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

yeah, it's hard to break out of that writers block. I know EXACTLY how you feel. nice poem, keep it up. don't stop writing, it's how we all improve. You have such great emotion in this poem.

[Sarah Jane]

It sounds very blue to me. Blue being sad, sorry. I hope that writing it made you feel better about whatever seemed to be making you blue. I liked the color codes as well, really made certain words stand out, as planned I suppose:)

[Rhea]

quite appreciable..simple but lots of gravity..

[Amber "Victoriomantic" ..]

This poem sounds very sad, but I hope it gave you some release to write it. You speak true words.

[kaylynnmelody♥]

Beautiful and inspiring. :)

[Nath]

Beautiful poem!
I am convinced that at some point, we all feel like this at least once in our lives. Even if in other regards, we are not at all the same.

[kayla]

Interesting way of writing, which left me very interested and excited to finish it(:

[Aarontastic]

I like it. The poem has a torpid voice so it lives up to its title, and the opening six lines are clever in their alliteration and nicely set the mood for the rest of it. The main themes seems to me to be tension and pressure surrounding the speaker because of a decision or decisions they need to make. I thought you articulated that well, but the last few lines veered a little bit away from that, so possibly it could have had a better ending IMO. Overall nice work :)

[Nirmala]

In different measures we experience many of the same emotions, but we are measured by the way we handle our experiences and react to the rest of life.