Pink Cherry Blossoms

For David Beretta Owens... but he doesn't even know it

Pink cherry blossoms bud when you breathe out

I turn my head and breathe it in

The blood pumping through my heart:

...I could draw on you

Do you even see me stare at your skin?

 

Open the door for the sunshine

Open the door for the love

So you can come out to play

So you can come home to stay

 

A classic argumentative display

Like sweet syrup stuck in your beard...

I’d kiss it, despite your look of dismay

I’d frame your little picture

or erect a monumental structure

 

If I could...

 

 

Author's Note

I'm not obsessed about this guy... he is just so nice to look at and listen to. Just appreciating ;)

Reviews

[Dark Heart of Winter]

Awww! Adorable :-) though at first I thought it was for a person in a hospital bed comatose :P

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

This was such a cute poem. Nicely penned.

Kaze~ :-)

[Alani]

Thank you Kaze :D

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-)

[Susie]

This is really cute. Leaves me with a warm feeling.

[Alani]

Thanks Susie :) x

[Parimal Pratyush]

I would like to have the song. :D

[Alani]

:) And you will! I will be recording it in the next 2 weeks x

[Jennie Baron]

I love your language and imagery. I too was fooled by the gender roles and yes, it might be interesting to switch them.

[Alani]

That's an interesting take on my poem. Can you explain a little more by what you meant:
"I too was fooled by the gender roles and yes, it might be interesting to switch them."

[Jennie Baron]

See the review by Jennifer below. The beginning sounds like a statement by the man to the woman and then it turns out to be vice versa. She suggested playing with that and even switching the roles. I also like the unexpected twist, though. It goes against stereotypes for sure.

[Alani]

Thanks Jennie Baron x

[Lauren]

This is so creative! It has a light and airy feeling to it, I like it.

[Alani]

Yes! That's what I wanted to portray, because that is how he makes me feel :)
I am recording the song soon, if you'd like to hear it?

[Lauren]

Absolutely!

[Jennifer Johnston]

As other commentors have said, I feel like the beginning stanzas were written by a man to his girl...we find out later this isn't the case, and I was wondering if you could sharpen the 'correct' image you wish to display. Or...and this could be a fun exercise, switch the genders entirely. Some really lovely language in this. Nice start!

[Alani]

Thank you for liking it... I don't think any of my poems should be sharpened into the correct image to be displayed. I think I have carried across my feelings, the way I intended, quite well :)
If I had to change it, I would definitely become fake and not raw x

[Bright Ocean Star]

wow....this one definitely puts your heart open and out there. Very nice write.

[Alani]

Thanks Bright Ocean Star! :)
xxx

[Lyn Anderson]

Brilliant. Interesting word choice at the end, I almost would have thought this written by a man :)

[Alani]

:) I have this thing about me... I tend to put up a masculine vibe when I don't want my heart to be broken OR when I feel embarrassed about showing my feminine side...
But then my feminine side wins ;)