I Don't Love You

Musta written it 3 years ago; just came across it today.

“Baby, why won't you say those three words?”

“What words?”

“Are you an idiot?”

“No.”

“Then why won't you say them?”

“Because.”

There was a soft smile tugging at his lips and I felt like smacking him across the face. Across that little mischievous, half smiling little boy face. Leave a mark.

“Say them.”

Oh yes, there she goes again. Ordering me around. What if I don't want to say them? I'm not the idiot here. Can't she see that I don't love her? I said nothing in response to her demand, just stood there and watched her eyes; her deliberate angry eyes searching mine. Probably hoping for something...

The world went a little blurry and only after the salty tear dribbled down my cheek did I realize I was crying; crying for him.

I almost lifted a hand to wipe the tear away... But stopped. Let her suffer. Let her come to the realization the hard way...

Why?

Simply because I am too shy to even utter a syllable.

Author's Note

I'm not too sure about this one, lemme know what you think.

Reviews

[RachelReaper]

I think that this is covered in awesomesauce! Seriously, you captured these two voices in a realistic manner.

[Mike]

Very bold and very to the point.

Love the way you created a poem with a conversation or visa versa. Which ever it was it is very effective and delivers a strong message

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks so much =]
Was what I was aiming to do

[KT]

Very deep, I like it. It's a little harsh, but in a good way. A way that says "I can't lie to you just to make you feel better. That would be more cruel than if I said nothing at all." And he doesn't. I think your guy character is a little mean, but I like the idea of being honest. Great write!

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks. =] Yeah, Mr. Man is a jerk, but he's demonstrating how sometimes you need the pain of honesty from someone else to understand that things aren't how you want them to be.

[Caradoc]

To say what you do not feel would be just another lie. It would be even worse to utter those three words and for the other to find out you never meant a word than to keep your silence and let them figure it out on their own. Such things are never easy to handle, to witness, to endure.

As Nathan below stated, the double perspective from both characters is a nice touch. It helps illustrate that people have their reasons for things, even if they are unduly harsh. We can never fully understand unless we try to see it from the other person's point of view.

Nice write.

-Caradoc

[AleyshaRosa]

That was definitely the point I was trying to get across, thanks for taking note.

[Caradoc]

It wasn't hard. You illustrated it well.

[AleyshaRosa]

Nonetheless.
Thanks =]

[Caradoc]

Well then, you're most welcome.

[NathanBlackie]

Honestly... I think the guy sounds like a d********g. but I really like the changing perspective.

[AleyshaRosa]

The guy IS a d********g =P Maybe I was in the middle of a bad relationship at the time, I don't know. Yeah, I thought the perspective change would give it something a little more outside the box.

[NathanBlackie]

Love the photo, I don't love you was always a song I found hard to fit into the story of the black parade, doesn't mean i didn't love it.