In a Dream

Inspired by a dream I had, shocker...

Fallen into a dream:

dark and dogmatic

clear and emphatic

where a forest so definite

so real I could feel it

enveloped me.

 

My feet

bare and bearing'

weight and witness.

On a carpet of leaves

where reality cleaves

away slowly.

 

Abstract thinking

ignominous and idle:

let leaves fall, dead and tidal

cover this broken body

laying restfull and free

from reality.

 

This peacefull rest

safe and sedimentary

seas of sanctuary.

Here larva burrow and mine

silken threa filling my mind

now empty of all else.

 

In a forest of faith

rooted in rhetoric

still as statues.

Marble cracks and falls asunder

as do many such wonders

as magnificent and chained.

 

This shelter:

beautifull and benevolent

transfixing and terrible.

Remember to wander

remember to wonder.

All things need sunlight now and again

and shelter from the pouring rain:

forget neither,

lest you smother yourself in either.

 

Author's Note

Just expressing myself, all reviews welcome.

Reviews

[deeps]

I like this write I thought it was quite wonderful.
You express yourself quite well. This is very well written

[VintageCocoa]

Enjoyed the last bit, needs a lil tweaking with spelling but other than that, good job
Remember to wanderremember to wonder.All things need sunlight now and againand shelter from the pouring rain:forget neither,lest you smother yourself in either. - Nice flow-

[Sam Davidson]

I think this is a really complete and well-written poem. I get a sense of a single thought, being organically developed and grown; a very impressive feat in a write which sticks to a fairly rigid rhythm. I think I need to read this again but the general feel of it to me was... beautiful.

[Sidewalk]

I'm imagining your body decomposing in the dream. this is my first read, impressive stuff.

[Jemma]

Loved it.
Nice write.