Under the surface

Drily troughs in the backyard of my shuttle path. I have blinked to the last monster to come out. It takes the surface, but I can see through. I lie behind the corner of the path with dreams higher than mountains and shivery as the wings of the same butterfly that expired the last fragment of chaos. Me and my suitcase are frozen catapults, but the sunrise will save our sparkle and bring us to the other side. I at least dare you to exempt us golden friend...

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we fly on the wings of shivery, and those monsters don't scare us...we see right through them...like a bully...punch him once and he cries then retreats...fragments of chaos try to stop us...but if we are brave enough, we catapult right over the mess and find golden skies.

i like the brevity here...less is more...and you create so much more with what lies between your lines.

[Jeannette Lunete]

Thanks for this punctilious interpretation. I appreciate it a lot. :)

[Wórdsmíth]

Oh... very heartfelt write. This short-piece`s got a large strength to attract readers.. Nice imagery. Keep it up!

[Jeannette Lunete]

Thank you very much Wordsmith. I appreciate it.

[Wórdsmíth]

Always a pleasure to write you some words of wisdom blowing the tuft of smiles on your vanila face.

[Briana O'Connor]

Your words are very elegant and have an emotional impact. They flow like a poem. Thank you for sharing.

[Jeannette Lunete]

Thanks a lot Poetic Lust. I can just return compliments to your style. :)

[Rossen]

growing on me,this way you have...

[Jeannette Lunete]

I am glad that it affects you in a certain way. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

so enjoying getting to know you a bit! again a very unique style and crisp deliberate phrases and word choices .. i think you have quite the mind thing going on JL :)
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[Jeannette Lunete]

Thanks a lot Einstein Noodle. Your reviews make me smile. I am glad that you enjoyed this disclosure of my neverending state of mind. :)

[Taurean X Hunter]

I really like your writing style, its very unique.

[Jeannette Lunete]

Thank you very much. It means a lot to me! :)