Break Free

Hope this is okay.

I am imprisoned by a chain I can’t escape
I try to run away but it endlessly pulls me backwards
Like quicksand, the more I attempt to move the faster I sink

Tape over my mouth, so I am unable to scream for help
There is an audience just watching me go further into the void
No one trying to help me escape my pre-destined fate

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Cassidy14]

This is very heart-wrenching and beautiful. It is short, but you portrayed well. Most of us struggle because we tell ourselves that we can't do something, or that we're dumb or ugly. In reality, we are amazing. Very good work here.

[AllauraRose]

Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

We place ourselves sometimes in situations where we allow the chains to hold us in and prevent our movement or growth- choices get us where we land up- to be free we need to search deep and unchain ourselves- not easy but possible if we want - nobody’s life should be a chained one- if we are happy and content there’s no place for chains- break free- 🌹

[AllauraRose]

Thanks and I agree we are able to unchain ourselves because we are normally battling our inner demons. Thanks for the review!

[Coyote Poetry]

I know the feeling of the poem. You want to escape and you cannot. I felt the struggle in the words. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[AllauraRose]

Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked it and thanks for the feedback!

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy and you are welcome.

[Ms Paragon]

Nice use of imagery.You can actually feel the agony of not being able to escape.The main thing is who is this person imprisoned by?Who puts the tape over their mouth?You get the reader involved!Nice work!

[AllauraRose]

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it!

[H L Rose]

This is kind of scary! You’ve done a great job protraying a terrifying concept. I’m sure it would hit a different chord depending on who the reader is, which is another reason why I think it’s written so well. It seems to be a good balance of vague and specific which allows it to be widely relatable.

It an intriguing poem!

[AllauraRose]

Thank! I’m glad you liked it!