She Tastes Good

when I wake up late

Sun and Bird have cast a spell

I am sipping love

Reviews

[Clockwork]

I really like the final line. I believe that it is the strongest line in the poem overall. I think you can get rid of the word "have" and add the word there, so the line would read "Sun and bird cast their spell. You could even put in a dash after the word spell if you wanted.

Overall, I like the piece and what it says about the routine of the speaker and their connection to nature.

[Kyle]

Sweet! And original.

[MoriartyMesa]

Oh, i get it.



Nice job you clever thing..............

[Alpris]

This is true, DreamShaper :P

There is no metaphorical definition behind Bird. Bird is actually a bird, but I capitalized it to give it significance; same with the Sun... for purposes that Christian (Clockwork) pointed out, to draw the connection between me and nature which is the love I speak of.

[Alpris]

Could be, not sure yet. Probably not.